Fictional Writing Prompt #2

Prompt: During a war two childhood friends finally meet again, but it isn't the happy reunion u expected.


"I trusted you!"
     I fell backwards on the ground, the coarse dirt road bit into the palms of my hands.
Keres sneered,"Poor choice really."
    I turned to look at her, the person who took everything from me. My family, friends, now my kingdom. Soon she would take an attempt on my life.
I felt the heel of a boot rest heavily on my windpipe, 
    “Any last words princess?” I looked her dead in the eyes, hoping to see a glint of humanity, something that told me she wasn't the monster currently threatening my life- The only thing that looked back in me was cruel amusement.
    “I suppose that your title is no longer effective if the only thing you rule over is corpses” She raised an eyebrow mockingly. I struggled underneath the heel of her boot, I was losing air. I saw Black spots, I could feel the tears welling up; blurring my vision.
     "Why."
"Excuse me?"
" Why-" I choked on my words, " Why did you do this? You turned you into a monster of a human; give me a rea-" 

        White hot pain surged through the left side of my cranium, I saw nothing but black. 
"Because, It takes a monster to defeat one."

Short Story By: Ellie Klubertanz

Comments

  1. AnonymousMay 18, 2021 at 5:56 AM

    Wow, that was powerful. I love that you didn't stick to the traditional 'happy ending", hut rather you let the despair in, and added a huge plot twist at the end. I think that was really cool. I really felt sympathy for the narrator character as I was reading, but after that last line, I'm not sure who's side I'm on. Great job!

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  2. R. ReaglesMay 18, 2021 at 10:17 AM

    "I felt the heel of a boot rest heavily on my windpipe."
    Great detail. There is submission here, the sense that the character on the ground is thoroughly beaten. The last line of the scene is also powerful. Monsters beget monsters.

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  3. AnonymousMay 18, 2021 at 11:10 AM

    Amazing short story it leaves me wanting to know what happened before that caused this, and what happened afterwards! The details are really creative and you can tell a lot about the characters through the dialogue.

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  4. AnonymousMay 18, 2021 at 11:11 AM

    I love the choice of words you used it really put a picture into my mind. This piece was so strong and the ending was so good. I liked how you said at the end "because, it takes a monster to defeat one" It really brings you back into the real world and makes you think.

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